[Answered] EBS-033 Essay 1 Peer Review (2)

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Peer Review Sheet – Essay One ROUGH DRAFT – EBS-033 

Essay Title: (ALL essays need titles):

Essay Writer:

Peer Evaluator:

Date:

  1. How does the writer grab the reader’s attention (what is the hook – WRITE IT OUT)?  Is this hook effective?  Why or why not?  Explain in one complete paragraph (7 sentences minimum).
  2. Does the essay contain a clearly defined thesis related to the prompt (Discuss ways Amy Tan and her mother were impacted by Amy Tan’s mother’s “broken English”)?  

Where is it located?  What is the thesis statement?  (Write it out.)  In your own words, what does it mean?

  1. What are the transitions and topic sentences?  WRITE THEM OUT. 
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  1. Does each topic sentence clearly identify what each paragraph will cover, and is each one related to the thesis statement?   If not, point out which one(s) are weak.
  2. What is the supporting quote for the first supporting paragraph?  (Write it out.)  Is the support connected to the point before it  (Write it out)?
  3. What is the supporting quote for the second supporting paragraph?  (Write it out.)  Is the support connected to the point before it (Write it out)?
  4. What is the supporting quote for the third supporting paragraph?  (Write it out.)  Is the support connected to the point before it (Write it out)?
  5. Does the conclusion do a good job of revisiting the thesis and supporting points?  If so, why?  If not, what can be done to make it better?
  6. Is there a correct and complete MLA works-cited page?  Refer to the links in the course to see whether or not all elements that are required for an MLA work-cited page exist – don’t just guess. 
  7. Does the essay fulfill the purpose of the assignment?  Explain how it does or does not.  Explain how it does or does not in one complete paragraph (7 sentences minimum).
  8. What is one thing you really like about this essay?  What is one thing you would tell the writer to make the work stronger? (7 sentences minimum).

 

Solution

The writer grabs the reader’s attention by introducing the essay with the line, “Communication can be difficult; it can be charming or terrifying, but consider it fortunate when one finds its true meaning.” The writer’s hook is compelling as it manages to grab the reader’s attention. Once one reads the introductory line, they are drawn to the possibility of finding the true meaning of communication………. Purchase the link to access the full answer @$6